11-20-2006, 05:37 AM
Minor things:
Utterly condemming --> Condemning
There is a typo as written and usually less = more. If you can always find a way to include more white space in a document, more players are likely to read the resolution from start to finish.
I'd talk to Hack about making a reference to Civil Rights Post War, basically suggesting that in the past the UN has been concerned about civilian loss of life. He might view that as a "House of Cards", but I personally like a few back references -- it also may help say, "Hey, I've looked at what we did in the past."
Utterly condemming --> Condemning
There is a typo as written and usually less = more. If you can always find a way to include more white space in a document, more players are likely to read the resolution from start to finish.
I'd talk to Hack about making a reference to Civil Rights Post War, basically suggesting that in the past the UN has been concerned about civilian loss of life. He might view that as a "House of Cards", but I personally like a few back references -- it also may help say, "Hey, I've looked at what we did in the past."