05-22-2005, 07:39 PM
First of all, the old forum is for archive purposes only. No-one has admin access anymore, so here is where it happens. Feel free to register, because as an official diplomat you'll get some more possibilities to post here.
Oh, and as you can see I moved this topic to the UN forum.
Now, on the resolution:
First, start with a pre-amble to explain why this resolution is necessary. Many nations will appreciate it, and a good start helps to "sell" your resolution.
Secondly, the formatting is a bit confusing as it is now. It's not really clear on first view what you want.
Thirdly, this resolution does quite a lot. I think it might be wise to take it one step at a time, and limit this resolution somewhat. That might also increase the chances of getting passed. If you concentrate on the first point, the prisoners or conscience, it might be clearer what you want. The rest is kind of covered by it as well, so no real loss there.
By the way, is "prisoner of conscience" a realworld term? To me, it sounds a bit like someone imprisoned by their own conscience, instead of because of their conscience.
Oh, and as you can see I moved this topic to the UN forum.
Now, on the resolution:
First, start with a pre-amble to explain why this resolution is necessary. Many nations will appreciate it, and a good start helps to "sell" your resolution.
Secondly, the formatting is a bit confusing as it is now. It's not really clear on first view what you want.
Thirdly, this resolution does quite a lot. I think it might be wise to take it one step at a time, and limit this resolution somewhat. That might also increase the chances of getting passed. If you concentrate on the first point, the prisoners or conscience, it might be clearer what you want. The rest is kind of covered by it as well, so no real loss there.
By the way, is "prisoner of conscience" a realworld term? To me, it sounds a bit like someone imprisoned by their own conscience, instead of because of their conscience.