03-15-2023, 11:50 PM
Art 2(a). - if there isn't going to be an Art 2(b), either move Art 2 to Art 2(a) (and Art 2(a) to Art 2(b)), or move Art 2(a) to Art 3. Or add a new Art 2(b), though with what content, I do not know. Basically, a hanging Art 2(a) is slightly bizarre!
Art 4. "[...] national and subnational level,as well as [...]" - add space after the comma.
Art 6. "[...] membership as described in Article XXX of the Charter [...]" - XXX needs to be replaced with the relevant article. I believe that's referring to Art 11?
Art 8. "[...] nominate a slate of 14 member states [...]" - Why 14 members, as opposed to any other even number? Why not an odd number, to avoid ties where possible (excluding the event of abstention)?
Art 8. "[...] the President shall nominate a slate of 14 member states [...]" - Why have the President nominate and then approve? Why not create a rotating list (surely that's better for IC reasons?). OOC, doesn't change much, I suppose. Not strongly opposed to it, just curious as to the departure.
Art 9. "[...] The Security Council shall have the authority to enact binding resolutions and sanctions as well as [...]" - Add comma after "resolutions and sanctions".
Art 9. "[...] The Inner Council shall comprise the President of the Security Council and four members [...]" - Perhaps "the delegation of the President", as it is their state, not them as an individual?
Art 9. "All substantive business introduced to the Council shall first require the approval of a majority of members of the Inner Council of the Security Council." - A P5 "pre-veto"? I'm not sure this serves a good purpose OOC, and would present problems if it were applied IC (imagine Xiomera an Authoritarian nation getting put on the inner council, nothing substantive would ever make it to vote). Either the Inner Council should have different powers and duties (that don't stifle RP), or should be scrapped in lieu of it just being the SC.
Art 9. "The Security Council shall have the authority to enact binding resolutions and sanctions as well as order the deployment of League Peacekeepers." - No mention about required majority (except later for League Peacekeepers in Art 10). I suppose that hinges on Art 2(a)'s provision for simple majority? Though, should the SC hinge on a simple majority, or should it be a 2/3rds majority?
Art 4. "[...] national and subnational level,as well as [...]" - add space after the comma.
Art 6. "[...] membership as described in Article XXX of the Charter [...]" - XXX needs to be replaced with the relevant article. I believe that's referring to Art 11?
Art 8. "[...] nominate a slate of 14 member states [...]" - Why 14 members, as opposed to any other even number? Why not an odd number, to avoid ties where possible (excluding the event of abstention)?
Art 8. "[...] the President shall nominate a slate of 14 member states [...]" - Why have the President nominate and then approve? Why not create a rotating list (surely that's better for IC reasons?). OOC, doesn't change much, I suppose. Not strongly opposed to it, just curious as to the departure.
Art 9. "[...] The Security Council shall have the authority to enact binding resolutions and sanctions as well as [...]" - Add comma after "resolutions and sanctions".
Art 9. "[...] The Inner Council shall comprise the President of the Security Council and four members [...]" - Perhaps "the delegation of the President", as it is their state, not them as an individual?
Art 9. "All substantive business introduced to the Council shall first require the approval of a majority of members of the Inner Council of the Security Council." - A P5 "pre-veto"? I'm not sure this serves a good purpose OOC, and would present problems if it were applied IC (imagine Xiomera an Authoritarian nation getting put on the inner council, nothing substantive would ever make it to vote). Either the Inner Council should have different powers and duties (that don't stifle RP), or should be scrapped in lieu of it just being the SC.
Art 9. "The Security Council shall have the authority to enact binding resolutions and sanctions as well as order the deployment of League Peacekeepers." - No mention about required majority (except later for League Peacekeepers in Art 10). I suppose that hinges on Art 2(a)'s provision for simple majority? Though, should the SC hinge on a simple majority, or should it be a 2/3rds majority?