08-28-2016, 03:15 PM
Okay, here's my first suggestions for a revised draft:
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The World Assembly,
Recognising its members' continued commitment to the preservation of endangered organisms,
Concerned that illegal collection and smuggling of endangered organisms could undermine preservation efforts,
Hereby, subject to any limitations set by earlier resolutions that are still in force, including the fact that trade involving certain groups of organisms may already be covered separately by such legislation,
1. Bans the international import and export of all organisms belonging to species that have been designated as endangered by the World Assembly Endangered Species Committee (WAESC), and of goods derived wholly or partly from said life forms, except when any of the following exemptions apply _
i) They are specimens collected or being repatriated as part of scientifically run species restoration program;
ii) They are specimens grown in a laboratory or nursery environment outside of their species' native range, and birthed or grown from seeds, spores, or other material, that itself was collected outside the species' native range;
iii) They are goods derived from organisms that fall under exemption 'ii';
iv) They are goods that were derived from specimens in a manner which does not increase the species' endangerment and were collect purely for scientific purposes;
v) They are durable goods such as lumber, which can be historically or scientifically proven to have been processed before the species was declared endangered by WAESC and at least 99 years ago;
vi) The material from endangered species involved is widely dispersed reproductive material such as pollen or reproductive spores which is present at incidental levels on other trade materials is not regulated by this act;
2. Urges nations to pass legislation preventing the internal transport and monetization of WAESC-designated endangered species and derived products within their own borders;
3. Requests nations ardently enforce measures designed stop illegal collection and trade in WAESC-designated endangered species, and of products derived from these.
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I've changed the punctuation to match the 'customary' GA pattern which isn't legally "required" but will please some of the GA forum regulars.
I've changed the first preambulatory clause from praising the work of a WA agency to praising the member nations because that's likely to be more acceptable to the membership.
In the second preambulatory clause and the last operative clause, I've replaced "poaching" -- a term that I'm accustomed to thinking of only in terms of animals (and eggs, of course... ^_^) -- with the more general "collection": I considered saying "acquisition", but then we'd get jokes about the Ferengi 'Rules of Acquisition'...
I've re-worded the "Hereby" clause to place that word first, as is also customary in the GA, and modified the boilerplate phrase there make it clearer that this proposal wouldn't be trying to apply to animals while #267 is still in force, and moved the "ban" instructions down into a separate 'operative' clause.
I've numbered the operative clauses, which again is customary as it makes referring to them in discussions easier.
I've rearranged the list of exemptions slightly, which included moving your subsequent clause [in re-worded form] up into that list.
In the second exemption I've replaced "reproductive material" with just "material" to allow for, for example, plants grown as cuttings from vegetative material.
Do you also want to cover organisms from non-endangered species when those are from particular stocks (or 'populations') that are endangered, as #267 does in the case of animals?
Also, before posting a draft in the GA forum, it's advisable to settle on a Category and set the Strength or 'Area of Effect' as appropriate, and maybeso to include a clause justifying this choice in the preamble. For this topic, I could see potential justification either as 'Environmental' (although then the 'Area of Effect' would need discussion) or as 'Moral Decency' (although proposals in that category can be harder to pass...) and then probably 'Mild'.
The maximum length possible is 3'500 characters, including spaces & line-breaks: So far, we're comfortably within this limit.
Opinions?
:Bear:
_________________________________________
The World Assembly,
Recognising its members' continued commitment to the preservation of endangered organisms,
Concerned that illegal collection and smuggling of endangered organisms could undermine preservation efforts,
Hereby, subject to any limitations set by earlier resolutions that are still in force, including the fact that trade involving certain groups of organisms may already be covered separately by such legislation,
1. Bans the international import and export of all organisms belonging to species that have been designated as endangered by the World Assembly Endangered Species Committee (WAESC), and of goods derived wholly or partly from said life forms, except when any of the following exemptions apply _
i) They are specimens collected or being repatriated as part of scientifically run species restoration program;
ii) They are specimens grown in a laboratory or nursery environment outside of their species' native range, and birthed or grown from seeds, spores, or other material, that itself was collected outside the species' native range;
iii) They are goods derived from organisms that fall under exemption 'ii';
iv) They are goods that were derived from specimens in a manner which does not increase the species' endangerment and were collect purely for scientific purposes;
v) They are durable goods such as lumber, which can be historically or scientifically proven to have been processed before the species was declared endangered by WAESC and at least 99 years ago;
vi) The material from endangered species involved is widely dispersed reproductive material such as pollen or reproductive spores which is present at incidental levels on other trade materials is not regulated by this act;
2. Urges nations to pass legislation preventing the internal transport and monetization of WAESC-designated endangered species and derived products within their own borders;
3. Requests nations ardently enforce measures designed stop illegal collection and trade in WAESC-designated endangered species, and of products derived from these.
_______________________________________________________________
I've changed the punctuation to match the 'customary' GA pattern which isn't legally "required" but will please some of the GA forum regulars.
I've changed the first preambulatory clause from praising the work of a WA agency to praising the member nations because that's likely to be more acceptable to the membership.
In the second preambulatory clause and the last operative clause, I've replaced "poaching" -- a term that I'm accustomed to thinking of only in terms of animals (and eggs, of course... ^_^) -- with the more general "collection": I considered saying "acquisition", but then we'd get jokes about the Ferengi 'Rules of Acquisition'...
I've re-worded the "Hereby" clause to place that word first, as is also customary in the GA, and modified the boilerplate phrase there make it clearer that this proposal wouldn't be trying to apply to animals while #267 is still in force, and moved the "ban" instructions down into a separate 'operative' clause.
I've numbered the operative clauses, which again is customary as it makes referring to them in discussions easier.
I've rearranged the list of exemptions slightly, which included moving your subsequent clause [in re-worded form] up into that list.
In the second exemption I've replaced "reproductive material" with just "material" to allow for, for example, plants grown as cuttings from vegetative material.
Do you also want to cover organisms from non-endangered species when those are from particular stocks (or 'populations') that are endangered, as #267 does in the case of animals?
Also, before posting a draft in the GA forum, it's advisable to settle on a Category and set the Strength or 'Area of Effect' as appropriate, and maybeso to include a clause justifying this choice in the preamble. For this topic, I could see potential justification either as 'Environmental' (although then the 'Area of Effect' would need discussion) or as 'Moral Decency' (although proposals in that category can be harder to pass...) and then probably 'Mild'.
The maximum length possible is 3'500 characters, including spaces & line-breaks: So far, we're comfortably within this limit.
Opinions?
:Bear: