06-26-2016, 06:14 PM
I like this. My only quibbles are stylistic and grammatical. Should be "Mandates that all network owners/operators in WA member states refrain" rather than "refrains." Similarly, it should be "REQUIRES that all network owners/operators in WA member states give notice" rather than "gives." The last clause should end in a period and, conventionally, operative clauses are separated by semi-colons rather than commas. I know for a fact you will face some NatSov resistance on the forums, but note that the GA forum is in no way representative of how the WA will vote on your proposal. You'll also probably face some resistance on the specificity in the mandates clause.
Other than that, I think this looks good! Convincing preamble and an appropriate issue.
Other than that, I think this looks good! Convincing preamble and an appropriate issue.

